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Prologue I was a Tyrant  .... Twice the size of my enemies, the humans  . Charging through the human's defense machines... Nothing standing in my way. I was about to run around the corner and show the humans who owns this planet. But I heard a dragoon's  growl behind me, I turned around. The dragoon was whimpering in the corner and then pounced across the hallway to me. It was hurt...badly hurt. The thing that done that to him was like no human weapon I've ever seen. It was so strong... But i didn't wait to find out anything more about it, i was running the opposite direction. There was a human blockade of turrets  in front of me (but out of range, so there was no threat) But a human with the super weapon running towards me from behind... I had to make a hasty decision I charged at the turrets, they started firing...it hurt so much. But it was my only chance. I destroyed one of the turrets but when i reached the other side, there were more humans with the same weapon... Except one had this big metal suit on  .... He fired this yellow energy ball at me. It hit me and i collapsed to the ground. I looked at my legs, I'm pretty sure i used to have 6, but i had 4.... I looked around, i saw the humans walk towards me cautiously, but i saw 2 of my legs about a meter away. Damn it. I looked at my remaining 4 legs, 1 was in half, 2 were badly injured and 1 was fine. I heard that dragoon again, i got up and looked towards the dragoon. It leaped towards that metal suited human and pushed him to the ground. While the humans were distracted, i yelped out for help. 3 dretches  , 3 basilisks  , 1 dragoon and another tyrant (same as me) came in about 5 seconds. They must of already been on their way. I creeped up on a human that was firing at a basilisk . I looked at the yellow energy ball gun he was holding... It said: 'lucifier cannon' The human turned around, and i clawed him in stomach. He collapsed, screaming in pain. Weak humans. I stabbed him in the chest with my claw hands. I was still badly injured so I retreated back to the base...  So, what do you think?  This is my first story based on a game, so i hope i converted the game to a story successfully.   Also, i'll post chapter 1(this was the prologue) after i have a few responses. |
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« Reply #1 on: July 11, 2009, 06:28:18 PM » |
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not bad I like it! it s interesting to see a rants sympathy for goon
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« Reply #4 on: July 12, 2009, 04:36:45 AM » |
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thx guys.
That was the prologue.
R u ready for chapter 1?
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« Reply #5 on: July 12, 2009, 04:57:29 AM » |
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CHAPTER 1 I Crawled back to the base. I confronted the Overmind and told him about the battle between the small human squad  and us. He was furious at me. I was a higher-evolved form of most aliens. I should of been able to defeat a human squad on my own. But i needed assistance and i still lost. I was a discrace to the aliens. I trampled home. As soon as i went threw the creep , my son (a dretch , still too young to fight) jumped at me. He caught me by surprise and my claws almost killed him. My wife, an Adv. Granger  , picked up my son who was badly injured and put him inside the hovel  . My wife gave me an angry look and she went to sleep. I went to sleep in my hovel . I woke up to the pain of a bullet in my rib . I got up and charged at the human squad that was in my hive. My son was trying to bite at the humans but he wasn't doing much. My wife was hiding in her hovel . I killed those few humans but then more came in. There he is, the same human with the metal suit . He somehow remembered me and sprinted out the doorway. I growled at the last humans and they ran off screaming. I checked on my wife in her hovel . She wasn't hiding...she was dead.... I trampled out the door with a huge roar . The human ships  were about leave back to earth  . DAMN IT Wait.....i had an idea. I went back threw the creep and called my daughter (Granger) over to come with me. My son wanted to tag along as well. I told my daughter to hide in a cargo crate. My son would have to stay with me. Then i saw it, the grand human ship...Tremor  . I called for more aliens.. Not many came, I'm guessing the humans killed most of us. Me and my brother, another tyrant , led the charge. How'd ya like it? |
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« Reply #7 on: July 12, 2009, 09:00:03 AM » |
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Uh, what do you mean by that? I've seen you play on tremulous, ur good. But your way of communicating baffles me.
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« Reply #9 on: July 12, 2009, 11:15:58 AM » |
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OMG WTF FFS BBQ!!?? uh....hows my story. |
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{NoS}Your FaceTremulous is probally the best freeware you will ever play. whats better then being a humman gunning down aliens or an alied killing soem humans.
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« Reply #12 on: July 12, 2009, 09:24:54 PM » |
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Baconizer, I agree completely, except you forgot that   Without this the latter part of your arguement falls apart completely. Also, I was replying to moose when I said moose: I was correcting a slight logical error in his emotespeak. |
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« Reply #18 on: July 13, 2009, 05:09:54 AM » |
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« Reply #19 on: July 13, 2009, 05:43:56 AM » |
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Are you guys ready for chapter 2?
Give me the word an i'll post it.
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« Reply #21 on: July 13, 2009, 06:40:19 AM » |
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« Reply #23 on: July 13, 2009, 08:21:52 AM » |
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srsly, stop messing with my mind plz.
Do you want chapter 2 or what?
I'm currently writing chapter 6 now, so there's a lot to read until then.
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« Reply #25 on: July 13, 2009, 09:23:22 AM » |
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FFS....
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« Reply #29 on: July 14, 2009, 01:38:21 AM » |
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Thank you UniqPhoenix. Someone acting mature for once. CHAPTER 2 CCHHAARRGGGEEEE We all charged towards the humans . The humans all dashed for Tremor, the huge flagship of the human fleet. The cargo crate that my daughter was in was quickly transferred into Tremor ....Excellent My alien warriors charged at the guards , it was an epic battle. 100's of aliens  and 1000's of humans. I looked at the closest human, I was about to swipe at him but a dragoon pounced at him from the right. The dragoon ate its meal graciously. I snapped at the dragoon to continue fighting. It left its meal and pounced at another human and then another and so on. These humans were falling like leaves in autumn. We finished off the human guards in about 15 minutes. That was too easy. All that was left to guard the Tremor was a huge amount of Automated Turrets . We charged straight through the turrets and on to the ship. But there lay what i was hoping would never happen again. About 20 of the metal suited humans stand there with lucifier cannons. With 30 of my aliens behind me and my son ...wait....OMG I looked all around while the humans started to fire. All the aliens charged towards the humans. We were the ones falling like leaves. I kept searching for my son. A bullet hit my chest and i charged at the human , he fell down screaming. I left him to die of shock. I continued looking for my son. He was no-where to be seen. The humans had decimated our alien attack force.. There was me, my brother and a couple of dragoons ... And we only managed to kill 5 humans .... Just as all hope was lost, the aliens collapsed...it was a sign of surrender. I growled at the aliens telling them not to give up...they wouldn't listen. Me and my brother weren't going to give up. But this human changed our minds, he picked up a lucifier cannon and pushed it to my face. The human saw the anger in my eyes... I sensed the fear in him. I blew threw my nose a weak wind and he fell down screaming then he ran away behind the rest of the humans. I fell down as a human pulled out his blaster and shot me in the chest ... That really hurt....but that blaster is so weak...but it hurt so much.....ow... Then i saw humans kept dropping from behind. Plomp, splat, hiss...wait...hiss? I looked behind the humans, it was a basilisk killing all the humans silently and stealthy. When the humans realised they ran the opposite direction. That was towards me They all ran in my direction screaming like little grangers . I got up with my brother and we started slicing down the humans, one by one , two by two . The remaining humans retreated threw a doorway to the left. I then heard screams behind the door. The basilisk moved towards the door and it opened... There were flashing dim lights, and blood over the floor. I moved closer and i saw a granger hiding in a corner. Did that granger kill those 3 humans? on its own? I looked around the corner and there was an acid tube  . I walked towards the granger and picked it up... I realized it was my daughter... I put her down and told her to go hide...she ignored me. Grr... She went to the human entrance and blocked it with barricades . She told me she wanted to help me....help me fight by building defenses. I looked for my son and then the basilisk jumped at me. I was a bit more cautious this time and didn't swipe at him. The basilisk was my son... He had evolved... Well lets show these human who owns this planet...and this ship . |
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Thx guys. More coming up. CHAPTER 3 We all guarded the human entrance while my daughter put up defenses . We heard a human yell out 'COME ON!'. Me , my brother and the the other dragoons hid. The newly born dretches wall-walked above the entrance. My son, now a basilisk , ran into the hallway. We heard human screams and then a basilisk growl. My son barged back threw the doorway and laid down. He was too injured to fight. Then the dretches stormed through the hallway. I heard a human yell out 'Dretch storm!!!'. Once the dretches returned, i ordered my daughter to create acid tubes and trappers  around that entrance. She tried to but she said she felt sick and couldn't... I ordered her to create an overmind . That might be the reason. I suddenly heard 'The overmind has awakened!' My daughter tried to fill out my previous orders. She no longer felt sick. We heard more humans trodding through the hallway. My son was ready to pounce but i kept him back. I heard clangs this time...as well as footsteps. A human opened the doorway... We were well hidden so he didn't see us. He walked forward and the acid tubes burst out acid at him. He tried to retreat but the dretches cut him down. Then i heard that same clang again. Clang, Clang, Clang. Then a door behind us opened. I felt terrible pain in my back... My brother swiped at the metal suited human that had ambushed me and killed him. I walked towards the booster , i started to regenerate quite quickly and my claws had a 'stingy' feeling when i touched it. Most of the dretches evolved into marauders after the second human attack. They went out on a hunting trip. They came back as dragoons , but with a few losses. I realized that this was our chance.. I ordered a meeting. Dragoons and tyrants were to stick together. Dragoons in front and tyrants at back, we would be known as tremulous-delta. The marauders were going to get into the human base through an alternative doorway and lure the humans out, they will be tremulous-recon. My son was going to stay back with the other basilisks at base to protect, they will be known as tremulous-xenon My daughter was to keep building. We ran towards our positions. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- So, how'd ya like this chapter? I can give you a sneak peak of the next chapter: <><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><> The Tremor slowly tilted and then started falling towards earth . All the aliens shreeked and ducked down. Hoping not to break any bones or limbs on impact. Ok, hopefully with that preview, you'll want the next chapter. Btw, the next chapter is shorter than most. |
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« Reply #33 on: July 17, 2009, 03:46:56 AM » |
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« Reply #35 on: July 17, 2009, 09:15:27 PM » |
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I want it give it i want it i cry give it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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really and you wont be making fun of every thing anymore great ill pay for a weed on your grave
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i'd appreciate it if you grew weed on my grave. tokin' from the depths of hell..
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A weed like thistle! not smoking stuff!
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Solar, do you like tomatoes? I have a bunch of seeds. Peas, too.
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Solar, do you like tomatoes? I have a bunch of seeds. Peas, too.
Ooh, wait! If you want, I could rip up the neighbor's rhubarb and plant it on your grave.
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really and you wont be making fun of every thing anymore great ill pay for a weed on your grave
English classes do help you learn a second language better, especially if you will need to use it for anything serious. |
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OMG..thank you archpyro. One of the few mature ppl to walk into the forums. Chapter 4 Tremulous-delta was waiting in front of the main human entrance... The marauders , Tremulous-recon, were going to tip toe into the side entrance in about 5 minutes. The marauders shrieked and charged into the base  causing minimal damage and then retreated back out the side entrance. Most of the humans followed them. The Tremulous-delta charged through the main entrance and cut down the remaining humans and retreated back out again. We waited to regenerate and then charged through again, we destroyed most of the turrets . We then went back out to regenerate again. As soon as we open the door to charge in again, a human squad was standing there. One with his rifle at my head ... I wagged my small tail. That was a signal for the advanced dragoon to snipe the humans. The advanced dragoon fired poisonous barbs at the humans . The ones that got hit fell down, the ones who didn't just ducked. That gave us the opportunity to attack while they were distracted. The marauders jumped over us and started swiping at the humans. The dragoons charged in and helped. Me and my brother stayed at the 2 entrances and killed fleeing humans. We've so got this, i thought to my self. The marauders yelped out a victorious screech. The dragoons immediately ducked down to eat at the dead humans . Me and my brother destroyed last remaining building. The reactor . As soon as we destroyed the reactor, the lights went out and the Tremor stopped moving... The reactor was the only source of power on the ship... The Tremor slowly tilted and then started falling towards earth. All the aliens shrieked and ducked down. Hoping not to break any bones or limbs on impact. We suddenly heard a big explosion. I fell out of consciousness... |
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« Reply #48 on: July 21, 2009, 02:12:04 AM » |
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Off-topic: Funny... On-topic: Good to see you're having fun with this. Keep it up. |
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« Reply #49 on: July 22, 2009, 12:46:56 AM » |
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a reacoter only power ??
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« Reply #50 on: July 22, 2009, 02:46:11 AM » |
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a reacoter only power ??
Its a reactor, not a reacoter. And if you've played tremulous, then you will know that a reactor is a source of power for human structures. Since the overmind isn't really 'power'. And if the Tremor is broken, like in the story, then I guess that the RC would be only source of power. Twigstik, please continue on with the story. Its good! |
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« Reply #51 on: July 22, 2009, 07:13:30 AM » |
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ok, thanks guys. More coming up. CHAPTER 5 I woke up to the sound of a pain saw. I looked around and it was still pitch black except for some glowing blue particles in the distance. I felt something touch me, i sensed it was my daughter and son by their scent. The advanced marauders used their electricity to power up the lights in this room. A dragoon told me that we had crash landed in a transit station. He also told me that the humans were just outside, trying to cut open a hole in the side of the ship. As soon as the pain saw stopped its humming, the marauders cut the power. I heard metal hit the ground. And i smelt humans coming inside, they weren't soldiers though... They seemed more like curious civilians. One pulled out a torch, so all the aliens hid. We made alot of noise while trying to hide and that caused the human to turn on the pain saw. The pain saw was emitting enough light that there was dim light all around the room. I was hiding behind a large crate, but my head was too high and i lowered it. I knocked an upper platform while doing so, the human turned on his torch and pointed it in my direction. More humans came inside, these ones were soldiers . The marauders lit the lights with their electricity and one soldier ,who was startled by the sudden lights, fired randomly into the room. One bullet hit a dragoon and it jumped at the soldier . I got out of hiding and pummeled down the humans . The human with the pain saw dropped it and ran outside screaming. I peeked outside and glared at the crowd of civilians surrounding the ship. I let out a huge growl and charged out. I trampled over the humans. The dragoons came out and helped. The marauders tried to power up the turrets on the ship. They focused the electricity to modify the turrets programming. The turrets started firing at the humans. After the humans were finished off, the turrets shut down automatically. The marauders came out of the ship looking tired... Powering lights for a whole room and turrets at the same time would be tiring and risky... I know some of this is is unrelated to tremulous EX: Marauders cant change turret programming... And they cant power up lights... But they have an electricity attack so i dont see why not. |
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« Reply #52 on: July 28, 2009, 07:03:05 AM » |
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« Reply #53 on: July 28, 2009, 07:21:54 AM » |
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« Reply #54 on: July 28, 2009, 09:33:18 PM » |
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« Reply #55 on: July 30, 2009, 05:40:46 AM » |
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I think the story is awesome, and you should keep writing. kthx
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{NoS}Your FaceTremulous is probally the best freeware you will ever play. whats better then being a humman gunning down aliens or an alied killing soem humans.
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« Reply #56 on: August 13, 2009, 05:00:07 AM » |
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more plz this story is awesome
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« Reply #57 on: August 13, 2009, 02:00:35 PM » |
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ME WANT NEXT CHAPTER NOW!!!Good work so far.
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« Reply #58 on: August 13, 2009, 05:34:22 PM » |
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More please, I'm a silent reader :>
How about making a new topic with ALL of the chapters in it, so it's like a book, unlike this topic with interupters :<
We all want more, no need to ask. kthxmoreploxbai
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« Reply #59 on: August 23, 2009, 10:39:21 AM » |
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hm....i've lost interest in this story sorry, i've got more important things to do, but i'll post what i've already typed, but haven't posted...
CHAPTER 6
We set up base in one of the of human vehicles called a 'train'.
There were 4 entrances inside, so it would be risky trying to keep humans out.
We managed to seal up one entrance with some creep.
But there were still 2 more entrances, and 1 entrance that comes through the roof.
We moved some crates into strategic positions, so it blocked the overmind out of sight from the humans.
We sealed up the rest of the entrances with a weaker creep.
The automatic opening doors aren't strong enough to break the creep.
But a human weapon could rip through the creep easily.
We managed to find a human reactor in the next room.
We destroyed it and all the lights in the station turned off, and the automatic opening doors stopped opening.
We were trapped in a train, while our base was open to the enemies in another train.
It was a trap...
I tried ramming into the door, but even the strength of a tyrant couldn't barge this door.
I saw a little box next to the door, about the size of a human hand, but a bit bigger.
I clawed at it.
A few electric sparks flew from it and the door opened.
An alarm then sounded 'Unauthorized Entry In Tram 303'.
Was that us?
I charged out the door, bullets went flying across the gap between this tram and our base tram.
I made it into the base.
The dragoons all ran at the same time, but a lucifier cannon was shot and killed/injured most of them.
The other aliens made it across safely while the human with the lucifier cannon was reloading.
They have our base surrounded now.
I ordered adv.dragoons to stand ready at the doors.
And snipe any intruders that come inside.
Dretches and basilisks were to wall-walk above the doors and swipe at anyone that comes past.
Tyrants and marauders were to go through an alternative exit and ambush the humans from behind.
Move out!
EDIT: I never knew so many people would like my story, so i may continue with it, but it'll take a while to get each chapter finished as reality kicks in and takes over my time.
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« Reply #60 on: August 23, 2009, 01:08:08 PM » |
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« Reply #61 on: August 24, 2009, 05:18:40 AM » |
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ME WANT NEXT CHAPTER NOW!!!Good work so far. Keep er comin. |
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« Reply #62 on: August 24, 2009, 11:38:08 AM » |
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hm.... Ah, what the hell, i'll continue the story, starting with chapter 7 tomorrow, i never though people really like my story though... Its one of the most popular stories on tremulous.net, thanks guys for your support! |
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« Reply #63 on: August 25, 2009, 03:06:54 PM » |
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« Reply #64 on: September 14, 2009, 06:13:01 PM » |
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Awesome story! Keep writing |
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« Reply #65 on: September 18, 2009, 02:35:52 AM » |
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Yes,yes. Keep the story coming! It is very entertaining.
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« Reply #66 on: September 20, 2009, 07:47:25 PM » |
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hm.... Ah, what the hell, i'll continue the story, starting with chapter 7 tomorrow, i never though people really like my story though... Its one of the most popular stories on tremulous.net, thanks guys for your support! Tommorrow = next month? |
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 but a small twisty barrel will have small pew pew's, and small pew pew's can hurt mr.tyrant.
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« Reply #67 on: September 20, 2009, 09:24:54 PM » |
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This is definitely better than your other one. Don't wait for other people to ask for more, just post the chapters.
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 ok, can you give me the tool thingy app that can code?
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« Reply #68 on: September 21, 2009, 08:27:21 AM » |
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hm.... Ah, what the hell, i'll continue the story, starting with chapter 7 tomorrow, i never though people really like my story though... Its one of the most popular stories on tremulous.net, thanks guys for your support! Must be a long day. |
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« Reply #69 on: September 23, 2009, 09:10:28 AM » |
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Sorry guys...but i've lost interest in this story...
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« Reply #70 on: September 23, 2009, 10:22:32 AM » |
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Sorry guys...but i've lost interest it this story...
But, But, But It was good. |
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« Reply #71 on: September 23, 2009, 09:55:56 PM » |
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CHAPTER 7 The first Human walked through the doors, he was clawed at by a basilisk and fell backwards out of the tram. The next human walked in and was sniped in the guts. The next human (these guys are stupid, eh?) walked through and was pounced by a dragoon . The body landed 5 metres out of the doorway....so did the dragoon . The doors closed and the dragoon was stuck outside with the humans . I yelled at the dretches to go on the roof and find a vent. Me and the bigger aliens followed them, but we just followed the dretches from outside the vents. I heard the dragoon yelping, and the it pouncing. It pounced up to roof of the tram where we were. It was injured from bullet wounds. I told it to pounce at the human  with the grenade, it may end his life...but it'll save many. The dragoon did as he was told and then came back. I looked down and realised the humans were pissing thier pants when they saw me ...so they ran off.... But the dragoon was able to pick off two of them. One was the grenadier . The group of aliens rallied and waited for the dretches to return.... We heard an explosion and dretches came flying out of the vent entrance like ants when u flood 'em. Most of them fell to the ground and were dead, but some kept running. A human came out of the vent holding a grenade. All the aliens yelped and ran away. The goons stayed to try and snipe him. But his lucifer cannon was too much for them. Next, more humans came out of the vent. Some with jetpacks, lucifer's, chainguns, grenades, flamers and more!! We ran as fast as we could, some of us went up the elevator...i was suprised it could hold the weight of 2 tyrants and 5 goons. The dretches /basilisks just wallwalked up behind us. We only just realised we left the maras behind, but a dretch told us they were wall-jumping up here. Once we got to the top there was an office....and an exit out to the human world..... Do we dare go through and conquer the human race?   |
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« Reply #72 on: September 27, 2009, 02:57:57 PM » |
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AWESOME STORY!!! READING IT IS VERY ENTERTAINING!!!more please
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« Reply #73 on: October 04, 2009, 11:35:20 PM » |
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the and the and the and the and the were the best parts of the story =( it's not a picture book anymore |
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« Reply #74 on: October 05, 2009, 01:01:26 AM » |
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the and the and the and the and the were the best parts of the story =( it's not a picture book anymore HAVE I LOST MY FUCKING MIND!!! Sorry...i'll fix that right away! |
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« Reply #75 on: October 05, 2009, 02:36:06 AM » |
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ah, now we're talking nobel prize for literature  have a booster shrimp medal |
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« Reply #76 on: October 06, 2009, 04:10:50 AM » |
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ah, now we're talking nobel prize for literature have a booster shrimp medal Thank you so much!! Kanye West: I'm sorry twig, but i think that-BANNED... Thx khalsa. |
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« Reply #77 on: October 06, 2009, 09:50:43 PM » |
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« Reply #78 on: October 07, 2009, 12:59:28 AM » |
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more like paris hilton by miles...
But it'd be the man yelling gimme moar xD
I'll go fix chapter 6
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« Reply #79 on: October 07, 2009, 02:51:25 PM » |
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« Reply #80 on: October 07, 2009, 07:03:54 PM » |
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are you planning to write MOAR? Please say yes yes plez do this is my life sustenance |
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« Reply #81 on: October 08, 2009, 02:54:37 AM » |
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hm..ok.
I'll do chapter 8.
BUT, i'll be needing the audiences halp.
Once the aliens breach the transit area..into the human world....where are they?
Should they be in an area based on a trem map?
Or any random human like city, forest, caves, what? where could they be?
Your choice may choose the path of which the tyrant and his minions take...
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« Reply #82 on: October 08, 2009, 02:57:53 AM » |
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hm..ok.
I'll do chapter 8.
BUT, i'll be needing the audiences halp.
Once the aliens breach the transit area..into the human world....where are they?
Should they be in an area based on a trem map?
Or any random human like city, forest, caves, what? where could they be?
Your choice may choose the path of which the tyrant and his minions take...
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« Reply #83 on: October 09, 2009, 08:14:37 AM » |
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« Reply #84 on: October 10, 2009, 05:56:58 PM » |
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mebbe liek nexus or transit
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« Reply #85 on: October 10, 2009, 11:53:53 PM » |
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lol, chapter 6 and 7 were in transit  Didn't you see the word 'tram' a bit much? hm..maybe nexus... Yes nexus! Thats the map with the big acid container laying in front of human base, isn't it? |
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« Reply #86 on: February 05, 2010, 02:21:47 AM » |
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these are some of the best alien stories on the forums. keep them coming. [/b] |
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« Reply #87 on: February 05, 2010, 12:28:40 PM » |
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« Reply #88 on: February 06, 2010, 08:01:16 AM » |
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« Reply #89 on: February 27, 2010, 11:35:33 AM » |
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« Reply #90 on: February 27, 2010, 03:59:38 PM » |
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« Reply #91 on: February 28, 2010, 11:59:50 AM » |
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« Reply #92 on: April 05, 2010, 01:55:38 AM » |
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Just read entire story.
So is there going to be a chapter 8?
If there is, I'm sure it will be great.
Btw, does anyone even read this story now???
I hope they will-this is great literature.
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« Reply #93 on: April 05, 2010, 06:10:53 AM » |
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« Reply #94 on: April 15, 2010, 01:16:35 PM » |
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i'm still reading this
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